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Making this topic for one the redo of my anime/manga story AND another story i had an idea for.

The anime/manga story remake will be called "Special Threat" (name subject to change... again)
The plot will be really different but have the same kinda idea to it as the first story did.
[spoiler]PLOT: The story takes place in a small city/town in japan. The main character Zack(name subject to change) is a high school-er that just moved from Tokyo after his father lost his job. He's a little more out going then most, yet laid back most of the time. after his first week of school, he joins a club called the "Active club". the club's goal is to have fun and do lots of things, even help others that ask them. The first activity the club decides to do since he joined is go camping up on a mountain for the weekend. one night during the camping trip while Zack is taking a walk, a space ship crashes down right in front of him, injuring him. When he comes too the ship opens up releasing a bright pink light that heals him. the light is so bright it can be seen from space and spreads over the whole world. when the light stops he can see a girl with pink hair inside. when trying to get her out of the ship he notices his hair has changed from just brown, to brown, black, blond, and red all mixed around. He carries the alien pack to his camp where he is stunned to see his friends hair color has changed and a girl who was short was now the same size as the rest of them. When the alien girl comes too she explains what is going on. she is the last of a race who admits a small amount of radiation that heals, repairs DNA, and speeds up natural healthy changes in living things. Things like birth marks, and cancer are fixed and healed over time. And the reason there was so much light is because she was in stasis for 10000 earth years when she escaped her home planet from destruction. The radiation had build up in the ship and was released all at once on the earth.

This would all be a good thing if it weren't for one little detail. Most intelligent species eventually learn to control matter with their minds and there body's become more resilient as that race evolves over time. they gain control over great power, and her power is known to speed up that process. The light that has spread over the world has given it powers it is not yet ready for. The world will change over night and the only one's who know why are the six kids from the "Active club".
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Here is the list of powers and the details on them (list not finished)
[spoiler]Powers List
                  [ Type 1 (control of one's self and forum)
normal -----------{ Type 2 (Control over nonliving matter of a certain forum)
                  [ Type 3 (transformation of most matter into a specific type of matter and control over said matter)

                  [ Type 1 rare (control over living matter mostly and rare/powerful transformations)
rare -------------{ Type 2 rare (control of up to 3 different types of matter "sometimes living" and other rare/powerful forces)
                  [ Type 3 rare (control of one type of matter and can become said matter and return to normal "some rare/powerful forces")

                  [ Type 1 special (has no ability but can copy one ability at a time that isn't rare or special and use for a limited time)
special ----------{ Type 2 special (control over a certain single force or energy in the universe and has complete control of it)
                  [ Type 3 special (control over most things with out limit)

Unclasifyed ------[ Type 0 Unclasifyed (has no powers of control by self and doesn't even have the strangth boost the powers event gave all humans)


Normal Type 1 Powers and Details:
#1: Super Human (All functions of the human body including strangth, speed, dextarity, and thought speed, are 2+ times better then normal)
#2: Accelerate (All functions are at least 10 times faster then normal and include movement speed and thought speed)
#3: Clay Form (total control over the shape and form of their body)
#4: Transform (can look like any living thing that has been seen, with all abilitys that comes with it "not powers though")
#5: Vampire (Most of the powers of Super human at 10+ times normal human, with the addition of transformation into a bat, and can fly/hover normally with out wings)
#6: Water Form (can Luquify body into water and move around, and can go where others can not, then transform back to normal)
#7: Cat Form (can transform into a cat person, when transformed had cat ears and tail alling with retractable razer claws and most of the powers of super Human but weaker)
#8: Psych Flyer (can fly very fast but can't make good maneuvers as such speeds, can easily survive a fall at terminal velocity, and is about 2-3 times stronger then a normal human)
#9: Invisible (can turn completely Invisible to all forms of detection execpt touch, Is a about 4 times faster and agile then a normal human.
#10: Intangible (can walk through walls and objects, and can fly/float while in still in contact with matter Is about 3 times stronger then a normal human)
#11: Ghost walker (Has Both Invisibility and Intangibilty powers and about 4 times stronger and 5 times faster then a normal human)
#12: Beast Form (can change into any animal at will, has one special form which combines the traits and abilitys of the users favorite animals, onto a special beast mode)
#13: Centaur Form (can transform into a centaur but will retain most human features, and will be 10+ times stronger and faster then a normal human.
#14: Weirwolf (can transform into a weirwolf which has razor sharp claws, and is 10 times as strong and 15+ times as fast as a normal human.


Normal Type 2 Powers and Details:
#1: Earth Shaper (Has control over existing rock, dirt, and stone, also has slight increase in strangth and resistance.)
#2: Water Shaper (Has control over existing water in its fluid and gasses forms, also has slight increase in strangth and reflexes)
#3: Air Shaper (Has control over existing air and most gasses that makes up breathable air, also has a slight increase in strangth and speed)
#4: Fire Shaper (Has control over most existing objects that are at the tempture of combustion, also has slight increase in strangth and speed, plus extream restistance to heat damage)
#5: Metal Shaper (Has control over metal and can control if freely, also has slight increase in strangth and resistance, plus extream restistance to electric shock damage)
#6: Technopath (Has control over silicon, electricity, gold, plastic and other such substances used in most electronics and pieces of technology, and can use them to subconisally create different devices that can be used, also slight increased strangth and extream increase in intelegence)


Normal Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Earth Maker (can transform matter into forms of earth and has same powers as Earth Shaper but slightly more powerful)
#1: Water Maker (can transform matter into water and has same powers as Water Shaper but also has control over ice)
#1: Air Maker (can transform matter into forms of air and has same powers as Air Shaper but slightly more powerful)


Rare Type 1 Powers and Details
#1: Dragon Form (this is a very rare form that gives the user extream strangth and speed and is the strongest of all forms, has two transformations the first of which is a half human half dragon form that can spew fire and the second form is a true full dragon which power is unmatched but is big and loses some of its speed in flight and on the ground, but is very resistant to damage.)


Rare Type 2 Powers and Details
#1: Psyic (Has control over any and all types of physical matter, can levitate and most things but cannot sort said matter, and control is some what limited)


Rare Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Air Master (has same powers as Air Maker but more powerful and can also turn self into air and back into human form)


Special Type 1 Powers and Details
#1: Ability Mimic (has no ability but can copy one ability at a time that isn't rare or special and use for a limited time)
#2: Type 1 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 1 abilitys and unlimited time)
#3: Type 2 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 2 abilitys and unlimited time)
#4: Type 3 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 3 abilitys and unlimited time)


Special Type 2 Powers and Details
#1: Heat Master (controls heat energy completely, can strip away heat and force heat onto other opjects, but must have physical contact with said matter, and is not effected by temptures)
#2: Electric Master (controls all electric and energy and can move it with zero wasted energy, not effected by elecrtic and can move at inhuman speeds)
#3: Gravity Master (can transfer mass from one object to another and can completely negate gravitys effects or increase them at will, can make black holes at high control levels)


Special Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Light god ( control over all energy, can bend trap and aim light with come control, and can move at speeds well above hyper sonic speeds)
#2: Pyro God (same as Heat Master but doesn't need phisical contact to move heat energy)


Unclasifyed Powers and Details
#1: Orignal Normal Human (a normal human before the powers even)
#2: Normal Human (all around increased abilitys over an Orignal Normal Human, also Has powers but are either not known of yet, or arn't active yet)
#3: Ability Zero (is the same as Orignal Normal Human, but has the ability to copy any and all powers from anyone as long as the user understands the person, once power is acquired it is permenint and can become stronger over time, and there is no limits on how many powers the user can copy)

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added some pictures of different hair styles for the main character along which what i need a second opinion on
[spoiler]so i have something that i would like you guys to look at regarding my story i'm writing,

I was going to have every character's hair match their power but decided to scrap that. but i do how ever want the main to change depending on a few things.

i have 10 pictures and i need 5: one for the main's look before any changes happen, like before the powers become a thing. then one after the powers come into play, but are unactive.
Then i need one a kinda rage form, you know, that character that goes crazy and totally ownes then can't remember what he did.
Then I need a form that is him starting to control said power (should look kinda like the rage form but different.)
Last I need an ultimite form, for perfecting his powers.

two things to note, if you actually feel like helping me out. first, the rage form and controlled rage form should at the least have some White as a main color as the Main's power represents a clean slate, and his power is to copy any power.
second the ultimite form doesent have to have white but it would be nice.

my thinking is: for starting look (picture 9), for unactive powers (picture 1 or 3) for rage look (picture 8), for controlled rage (picture 2, 4 or 7), and for final look (picture 5, 6, 7, or 10)

The reason the color of the main's hair is important in a written story, is because it will have something to do with plot.

SO IF ANY OF YOU READ THAT ALL AND HELP, LEAVE SOME THOUGHTS ON THE MATTER.[/spoiler]
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a little riddle i may or may not use.
[spoiler]Six children gathered by fate, will see the world and all of its hate, together they will stand shoulder to shoulder, to decide worlds fate forever and ever, Then One will appear to stand in their way, one will rise to fight that day, The two will clash while one will fall, at that time should you head the call, A beckon of pink that lights up all, will sound the end of any and all.[/spoiler]
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The new story i will be working on first will be more of a paranormal mystery. it will be called "UnNormal" ON HOLD
[spoiler]PLOT: This story follows a young man who when very young noticed some very strange things, that most people would write off as their imagination when they were kids. but he remembered as he grew up and decided to look into it. what he would find would change the world. He would find that paranormal is more normal then normal. Vampires, time travelers, super heros, mages, aliens, and and other things exist in every day life, but just out of site to stay out of mind.[/spoiler]

[spoiler]Life comes in many shapes and sizes. With it came thought and understanding. Yet life its self has yet to understand its self and its very own existence. Things may seem so clear on the surface that we dare not take another look. yet the truth may be more stunning then the idea that what you know and except is wrong. But if you look closely the truth is there, its just not clear. Its up to each person to accept that is real. Because there is a difference fact and true.[/spoiler]
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zman9000

#1
While i was banned I was working on my story so here is the updates to the story, along with some basic character outlines and some plot ideas.
[spoiler]The plot has been changed up to make more sense than my original one.

5 kids from a local school decide to have their club go on a camping trip. While on the camping trip "main" goes out to get some more wood for the fire. While getting some he sees a weird light in the sky, it gets closer until it crashes down on top of him. He doesn't die but he is in such a state where not even if he was in a hospital at that moment couldn't they save his life. The light dies down from the object revealing a small space pod. The pod opens to what is left of his feet. Suddenly a pink light flashes out of the pod. The light spreads like a nuclear blast, the light envelopes the camp site, then the region, then the country then continues to cover the whole planet before dying down.

When the light dies down "main" is no longer in pain, and to his surprise is whole again. he sees his arm lying beside him yet he has both his hands. Inside the craft, out plops out a pink haired girl. he picks her up and takes her back to the camp where they cut their trip short and go home. It is later reviled that all sickness, injury, and illness on the planet had been cured in both humans and animals. Also all species became much stronger and better resistant to being hurt.

After a few weeks people started noticing strange things, more and more people began discovering power to control, create, and change different things. Each person could only control one type of thing and at varying strength.
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Character notes:

The main character:  is a somewhat shy but cool guy, who keeps to himself even when with friends. But he has a very strong sense of justice and can't stand by when someone is in trouble. And he cares about his friends more than anything, even if he doesn't show it.

The alien girl: while having some respect for the main character who saved her, she feels she is above all humans as humans are the weakest of the high intelligent species in the galaxy. She tends to act stuck up around humans but is lonely as she is the last of her kind.

The comedic cool guy: while looked at as a jokester it is well known that he is smart and know exactly what he said, even if it leads to a fight. He is full of energy much to the Main's dismay. The Main and him are rivals and is one of the few who can get the Main truly angry.

The childhood friend: She is a bit of an air head at times but very levelheaded at other times. She is the childhood friend of the Main, who has a crush on him as well but is not apparent to most except the Comedic cool guy and her best friend. She is very strong for a girl and can overpower the comedic cool guy easily as she does so when he plays jokes on her and the Main.

Friend's friend: is the Main's childhood friend's best friend. She spends more time with her best friend then the group, but likes to go along with comedic cool guy which she gets along with very well. She likes to pick on the Main along with comedic cool guy. She's that classic best friend that likes to be in control over the guys at times.

Tech guy: is the founder of the club all the kids are in. he is exceptional with computers and will occasionally out smart even comedic cool guy. He is a little geeky but isn't exactly a weakling as he took martial arts with Childhood friend when they were younger. He is interested in many subjects thus the creation of the joint activity's club which combines a number of smaller clubs that didn't have enough members. Also has hacking experience and lives alone and clams his parents work for the government.

Orange kid: is a messed up kid unrelated to the 5 kids and alien, who has had a bad life, lived alone in one of the poorest places on earth with no family and is picked on and beaten by local kids daily. He wishes to live no matter what. but after having a puppy he saved killed in front of him he snaps and now contains hatred for the entire human race and has killed many in his path. He likes torchers his victims for a week before slowly killing them as he wants others to feel how he has suffered in life.
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Group notes:

Joint Activity's Club (nicknamed J.A): is made up of 5 kids, Main, CC Guy, Childhood friend, Friend's Friend, and Tech guy. Their goal is to do what interests them help people and have fun.

Alien Intelligence Research (AIR): Is a government organization that is tasked to hunt down alien tech and aliens to protect and better the human race. It's basically the men in black but they don't have contact with any aliens other then the ones they dissect.

Every Game Ever (EVE): is a gaming company that united all gaming companies and went on to control 95% of the gaming market. They went beyond just video games and created a sport called EVE Ball, which is a combination of soccer and football but with 4 teams not 2. They are always looking for something they can make into a game but they do care for their customers more than anyone thinks.
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Plot device ideas not yet stated: (numbers group ideas that string together)

-   1#One of the 5 kids has a relative that runs the school as to get the alien girl enrolled for her protection.
-   1#When AIR comes to take the alien girl, they are rough with her and finally hit her to get her under control while stating they are going to dissect her, which sets off the Main who displays an incredible display of power causing the AIR agents to retreat, but the Main doesn't remember what he did nor how to activate his power.
-   2#EVE creates a suit to make a arena type of game where people battle it out using their powers for fame and glory. Suit restricts user's movement after a certain amount of damage is dealt.
-   2#EVE suits become everyday where and arenas are made so everyone can challenge others to matches.
-   2#EVE suits get controlled by person with powers to control electric devices in an attempt to take over the world.
-   2#When the EVE suit crisis is over the suits are outlawed and EVE is fined for all damage done. Battle matches become official
-   3#Rampaging out of control power users damage school
-   3#More and more people start to lose control for unknown reason.
-   3#Mind manipulating user is revealed to be behind the out of control people.
-   3#Power category system is created to keep track of people.
-   4#Weak level users oppressed by more powerful users.
-   4#Separation of powers into three group levels 1 being the weak and 3 being the strong.
-   4#Uprising of level 1 power users against level 2 and 3 users.
-   4#Level 1 users succeed in defeating level 2 and 3 and demand equal treatment.
-   4#the level system is replaced by a ranking system of combat power instead of by type of powers.
-   4#EVE battle matches are made an international sport of peace between nations.
-   5#government begins looking into cases that related to powers and main 5 kids and alien are discovered to be related to all cases.
-   5#government officials show up at their club meeting and try to take them in, but the group escapes.
-   5#Thinking that the government wants the alien girl again the team decides to leave to protect her
-   5#after being on the move for a month they are finally captured.
-   5#it was reviled to all that there was a misunderstanding and the government after them is interested in the alien girl but doesn't plan to hurt her and aren't with AIR.
-   5#After some basic tests they are returned to their school and the government takes care out and problems that became of the misunderstanding with the promise that if anything else bad happened that the government and the 5 kids + alien girl would work together to help stop it.
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Some extra things, decided to change name from Zack for main to Zed... because it works better... ... darn you leaf and kain *shakesfist*
And yes
QuoteHe wishes to live no matter what. but after having a puppy he saved killed in front of him he snaps and now contains hatred for the entire human race and has killed many in his path.
I RAN OUT OF IDEAS OK!!
Check my youtube channel out for lots of cool gaming related videos at http://www.youtube.com/user/xXzman9000Xx

zman9000

#2
Update: added list of powers and the details on them.
[spoiler]Powers List
                         [ Type 1 (control of one's self and forum)
normal -----------{ Type 2 (Control over nonliving matter of a certain forum)
                         [ Type 3 (transformation of most matter into a specific type of matter and control over said matter)

                        [ Type 1 rare (control over living matter mostly and rare/powerful transformations)
rare -------------{ Type 2 rare (control of up to 3 different types of matter "sometimes living" and other rare/powerful forces)
                        [ Type 3 rare (control of one type of matter and can become said matter and return to normal "some rare/powerful forces")

                        [ Type 1 special (has no ability but can copy one ability at a time that isn't rare or special and use for a limited time)
special ----------{ Type 2 special (control over a certain single force or energy in the universe and has complete control of it)
                        [ Type 3 special (control over most things with out limit)

Unclasifyed ------[ Type 0 Unclasifyed (has no powers of control by self and doesn't even have the strangth boost the powers event gave all humans)


Normal Type 1 Powers and Details:
#1: Super Human (All functions of the human body including strangth, speed, dextarity, and thought speed, are 2+ times better then normal)
#2: Accelerate (All functions are at least 10 times faster then normal and include movement speed and thought speed)
#3: Clay Form (total control over the shape and form of their body)
#4: Transform (can look like any living thing that has been seen, with all abilitys that comes with it "not powers though")
#5: Vampire (Most of the powers of Super human at 10+ times normal human, with the addition of transformation into a bat, and can fly/hover normally with out wings)
#6: Water Form (can Luquify body into water and move around, and can go where others can not, then transform back to normal)
#7: Cat Form (can transform into a cat person, when transformed had cat ears and tail alling with retractable razer claws and most of the powers of super Human but weaker)
#8: Psych Flyer (can fly very fast but can't make good maneuvers as such speeds, can easily survive a fall at terminal velocity, and is about 2-3 times stronger then a normal human)
#9: Invisible (can turn completely Invisible to all forms of detection execpt touch, Is a about 4 times faster and agile then a normal human.
#10: Intangible (can walk through walls and objects, and can fly/float while in still in contact with matter Is about 3 times stronger then a normal human)
#11: Ghost walker (Has Both Invisibility and Intangibilty powers and about 4 times stronger and 5 times faster then a normal human)
#12: Beast Form (can change into any animal at will, has one special form which combines the traits and abilitys of the users favorite animals, onto a special beast mode)
#13: Centaur Form (can transform into a centaur but will retain most human features, and will be 10+ times stronger and faster then a normal human.
#14: Weirwolf (can transform into a weirwolf which has razor sharp claws, and is 10 times as strong and 15+ times as fast as a normal human.


Normal Type 2 Powers and Details:
#1: Earth Shaper (Has control over existing rock, dirt, and stone, also has slight increase in strangth and resistance.)
#2: Water Shaper (Has control over existing water in its fluid and gasses forms, also has slight increase in strangth and reflexes)
#3: Air Shaper (Has control over existing air and most gasses that makes up breathable air, also has a slight increase in strangth and speed)
#4: Fire Shaper (Has control over most existing objects that are at the tempture of combustion, also has slight increase in strangth and speed, plus extream restistance to heat damage)
#5: Metal Shaper (Has control over metal and can control if freely, also has slight increase in strangth and resistance, plus extream restistance to electric shock damage)
#6: Technopath (Has control over silicon, electricity, gold, plastic and other such substances used in most electronics and pieces of technology, and can use them to subconisally create different devices that can be used, also slight increased strangth and extream increase in intelegence)


Normal Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Earth Maker (can transform matter into forms of earth and has same powers as Earth Shaper but slightly more powerful)
#1: Water Maker (can transform matter into water and has same powers as Water Shaper but also has control over ice)
#1: Air Maker (can transform matter into forms of air and has same powers as Air Shaper but slightly more powerful)


Rare Type 1 Powers and Details
#1: Dragon Form (this is a very rare form that gives the user extream strangth and speed and is the strongest of all forms, has two transformations the first of which is a half human half dragon form that can spew fire and the second form is a true full dragon which power is unmatched but is big and loses some of its speed in flight and on the ground, but is very resistant to damage.)


Rare Type 2 Powers and Details
#1: Psyic (Has control over any and all types of physical matter, can levitate and most things but cannot sort said matter, and control is some what limited)


Rare Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Air Master (has same powers as Air Maker but more powerful and can also turn self into air and back into human form)


Special Type 1 Powers and Details
#1: Ability Mimic (has no ability but can copy one ability at a time that isn't rare or special and use for a limited time)
#2: Type 1 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 1 abilitys and unlimited time)
#3: Type 2 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 2 abilitys and unlimited time)
#4: Type 3 Mimic (same as Ability Mimic but only for type 3 abilitys and unlimited time)


Special Type 2 Powers and Details
#1: Heat Master (controls heat energy completely, can strip away heat and force heat onto other opjects, but must have physical contact with said matter, and is not effected by temptures)
#2: Electric Master (controls all electric and energy and can move it with zero wasted energy, not effected by elecrtic and can move at inhuman speeds)
#3: Gravity Master (can transfer mass from one object to another and can completely negate gravitys effects or increase them at will, can make black holes at high control levels)


Special Type 3 Powers and Details
#1: Light god ( control over all energy, can bend trap and aim light with come control, and can move at speeds well above hyper sonic speeds)
#2: Pyro God (same as Heat Master but doesn't need phisical contact to move heat energy)


Unclasifyed Powers and Details
#1: Orignal Normal Human (a normal human before the powers even)
#2: Normal Human (all around increased abilitys over an Orignal Normal Human, also Has powers but are either not known of yet, or arn't active yet)
#3: Ability Zero (is the same as Orignal Normal Human, but has the ability to copy any and all powers from anyone as long as the user understands the person, once power is acquired it is permenint and can become stronger over time, and there is no limits on how many powers the user can copy)



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Update: added some pictures of different hair styles for the main character along which what i need a second opinion on
[spoiler]so i have something that i would like you guys to look at regarding my story i'm writing,

I was going to have every character's hair match their power but decided to scrap that. but i do how ever want the main to change depending on a few things.

i have 10 pictures and i need 5: one for the main's look before any changes happen, like before the powers become a thing. then one after the powers come into play, but are unactive.
Then i need one a kinda rage form, you know, that character that goes crazy and totally ownes then can't remember what he did.
Then I need a form that is him starting to control said power (should look kinda like the rage form but different.)
Last I need an ultimite form, for perfecting his powers.

two things to note, if you actually feel like helping me out. first, the rage form and controlled rage form should at the least have some White as a main color as the Main's power represents a clean slate, and his power is to copy any power.
second the ultimite form doesent have to have white but it would be nice.

my thinking is: for starting look (picture 9), for unactive powers (picture 1 or 3) for rage look (picture 8), for controlled rage (picture 2, 4 or 7), and for final look (picture 5, 6, 7, or 10)

The reason the color of the main's hair is important in a written story, is because it will have something to do with plot.

SO IF ANY OF YOU READ THAT ALL AND HELP, LEAVE SOME THOUGHTS ON THE MATTER.[/spoiler]
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Also if you have any ideas you think i could use or something you think needs changed, please let me know what you think.
Check my youtube channel out for lots of cool gaming related videos at http://www.youtube.com/user/xXzman9000Xx

zman9000

#3
So I worked a rough outline of the important parts of the story that i have thought out.

[spoiler]3000BC - 2500 light years from earth: A planet of peaceful beings who call them self's Life Givers because of their ability to give off a special radiation that supports life, have an abnormally long life span of 1000 years because of it, are being exterminated by several other intergalactic races. Just before the destruction of the planet, a scientist sends his great great grand daughter in a special escape pod and launches it into space at an area that had come up in his research.

1AD - 1000 light years from earth: the escape pod, designed to protect its passengers no matter what, has kept her alive and un-aged for 3000 years with another 2000 years left until it reaches its destination. She, frozen in time, has no clue where or what she will find when she wakes up.

2006AD - 46000000 miles from earth: The pod drops out of 2 times light speed and slows, the ship begins its mission and scans the solar system "Sol". after detecting life it then heads off to the source at 1000 miles an hour for safe maneuvering as stated by the girls grandfather.
somewhere in japan: The main character Zed loses his sister after she is killed by kidnappers.

2012AD - 100 miles from earth: the pod begins its descent in japan.

touchdown day 1 - in some camp ground in japan: Zed is in the woods getting some more wood for his camp fire, for the club camping trip he is on. when he spots a comet. It gets closer and closer until it hits him. as the dust settles, half conscious Zed realizes that his body had been torn apart and just his head and half of his upper body remain. as he starts to slip away the ship opens and a bright pink light shoots out.
aboard the international space station: a astronaut watches as a bright pink light emerges from japan and spreads across the planet before shooting outward and vanish into deep space.
At crash site: Zed comes too finding that his body is completely healed yet one of his arms still lay beside him. when he sees the ship he is both stunned and confused. A young girl about his age with bright radiant pink hair lie at the opening of the ship. even more shocking is she is the spitting image of his dead sister.

touchdown day 2 - In Zed's home with his friends from his club: The alien girl still asleep the kids talk about what happened and what they should do. they learn the what happened happened to the whole world. And not only that but every injured, hurt, crippled, old, dieing, or ill person around the world is suddenly as healthy as could be.
after a little while two government officials barge in and after asking some questions find the alien girl. meeting some resistance the government workers use force and try to take the alien girl. after dropping a comment about alien dissection and rough handling of both Zed's friends and the alien girl Zed loses it. His jet black hair fades away to pure white, his skin goes very pale, and his eyes turn bright red. the house and surrounding area begins to quake before the floor boards under zed explode and he vanishes. he suddenly appear's in front of one of the guys and with no time to react a quick punch sends him through the wall, out side the house, bounces off a roof and falls on the other side. the second guy reaches for a gun but can't reach in time and is flattened into the ground by a punch. Zed then walks over and grabs a lamp and goes to hit the second guy with it, but before he can, his child hood friend grabs his leg and stops him, after a few seconds he calms down, the white hair fades back and he returns to normal and passes out.

touchdown day 3 - Zeds house: having dropped the government guys off at a hospital they begin to discus what they should do, until they are interrupted by a very loud rude and pink haired alien girl. the now awake alien demands a star ship to get off this backwater low tech planet and says that these humans are inferior to her and should server her. after some explaining and arguing the group decides to try and take her to her ship. when they get to the area they find it blocked off and government people everywhere. after a close run-in with the government guys from the day before, which are surprisingly easy to beat up and get away from while hurt, the group decides to help hide the girl until they find some way to get her back into space.

touchdown day 4 - school: thanks to Zed's child hood friend who is related to the principle of the school, they have the alien girl pose as Zed's sister and go to classes. She blends in well enough but other weird things within the school start to happen. first the fire alarm goes off then again, later the water the the bathrooms start to flow out of the pipes. several students broke their desks and others had constant head pain. one of Zed's class mates grew cat ears and tail while some others grew fangs. finally one girl turned into water during gym class and when down a drain then was later found by a road worker in the sewers. That night it was reviled that all over the world people had gained strange powers, ability's, and forms and in addition the human body became much more resistant to damage and healed faster and were stronger then ever.

touchdown day 5 - Zed's house: again having his club friends over, they begin to talk about what is going on since the government issued that all schools be closed for the week due to the strange events. they begin to talk about their powers and try them out. it is quickly reviled that Zed seems to hold no power of his own and doesn't even seem to have the added resistance as found out when his child hood friend accidentally sends him through a wall knocking him out.

touchdown day 6 - United nations broadcast: The U.N announces to the world about the powers and a plan on what to do about them. people are to only use them in private for the time and to do what ever they can to keep them under control in public. They announce that in 5 days all activity's will return to normal, and that in one month they will have an answer what to do with the powers.

touchdown day 7 to 33ish - school, homes, public: comedy, funny, awesomeness, fail government guys, the norm.

the powers week 1 day 1 - at schools: The U.N releases a program to schools and businesses to keep track of powers, and to help them control them so they can be used in daily life. All the students wright down their powers, or description of what they have noticed. Zed is marked as powerless/unknown as well as his 'alien' sister.

the powers week 2 day 1 - schools: thanks to a certain company, the results are in for the powers and powers are sorted into 3 groups for classification, type one, type two, and type three. the schools begin to set up for classes related to powers.

the powers week 3 day 1 - everywhere: minor fighting begins to pop up along with a spike in crime. governments begin developing countermeasures for powers. several company's, and organizations begin to work on several different things.

the powers week 4 day 1 - tv: a gaming company releases news of a game that will be able to be played using peoples powers, and believes it will lower street violence.

the powers week 5 day 1 - street: Zed and his sister are attacked on the street on their way to school, they are knocked out and kidnapped.

the powers week 5 day 2 - street: Zed's club friends are doing everything they can to find  Zed and his sister. A ransom is issued to Zed's child hood friend's grandfather who is Zed's legal guardian.

the powers week 5 day 3 - down by the docks yo: when getting ready to take Zed and his sister to the meeting place, the kidnappers decide to keep his sister back unless anything happens. Recalling the time when he was a kid and his sister was killed by kidnappers he snaps again, and in an explosion of fire and wind he transforms back to the white hair pale skin read eye's forum he had before. however the kidnappers are surprisingly strong. one has the ability to control time and space some what, and the other is immune to fire and is super strong. his quick display of power is over and is beat up against a wall, his sister tries to help him but gets knocked back. After accepting that he couldn't have saved his sister back then, he gains control of the form, his skin no longer pale but still having white hair and red eyes, he goes on the attack. using the his friends powers, and after a long drawn out battle, he defeat's the flame resistant guy and gets the time space guy to run off. they then leave to meet up with everyone to let them know they are alright.

powered arena day 1 - Zed's house: a week has passed, Zed is watching tv when, a news announcement on a new game comes on. the gaming company that decided to make a game with the powers had made a system where it is safe to fight with powers in an arena style area for sport. it quickly becomes known about and trial matches are being held around the world later in the day. Zed being bored takes his sister and they go watch the match.

Powered arena day 2 - school: the next day at school, the whole school is talking about the arena and talk about joining the matches. Zed isn't interested in it at first, but when his child hood friend reminds everyone that he beat up and escaped two kidnappers he gets pulled into it. after school the group goes and sign's up for a 5 on 5 match for 3 days from now.

Powered arena day 3 - ?: ?

Powered arena day 4 - ?: ?

Powered arena day 5 - local arena: ?[/spoiler]
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Misery

I've been waiting for the actual plot to this, it's nice to see that you've made some progress on it. While the whole of it still looks mostly like a set of personal notes, it's pretty easy to visualize it as an anime or manga at this point. So far there's only really one thing that's bugging me, that alien girl. You've said she's "the spitting image of his dead sister", and later on take up actually referring to her as his sister. Are they completely identical? If so, is there any particular reason for it? Dead people reappearing tends to cause some strange situations, but it seems nobody even reacts to it here. This is something that really needs to have a significant cause, if it's just coincidence it would be better to just make the alien resemble his sister in some way.

Have you decided what's going to be the main character's motivation, ultimate goal, or such? In the story so far there are still a few things that need to be resolved, but do you have any idea of what will happen then? Do you know how it's going to end?

Anyway, it seems like what you've done is basically to establish a setting that allows for cool stuff to happen. That might be a good thing.

zman9000

well the are many reasons for this, one reason was i was tired of typing alien girl, and sister is simpler. she will only be a sister for those out of the loop that she is an alien.

Next is relation ship wise, I needed the main to have a reason to protect her and go into a rage when she it threatened, yet he can't fall in love with her.

Finally for looking like his sister, his younger sister died when he was ten, so she was like 6 or 8. and the alien girl has pink hair while in this reality, people have normal colored hair. (at least before the event.) so she has the same face and has the same air to her that she resembles her. And she is the main characters age of 15 or 16.

spoiler for major story spoiler / stuff that will make you super confused as its not all the spoilers needed to make sense.
[spoiler]And since I already dropped these spoilers in skype chat for Kain and Leaf. The alien girl is from an old race of genetically altered humans. thus why she will be the only alien that looks human (besides hair color). And if you think that sounds crazy, it all revolves around the main plot, which i will get to soon. There's time travel, and mithos that come together make a complicated story.

Lets just say, the powers that were unlocked, humans once had before in the past, but much stronger, strong enough to rule the universe, but were over thrown by other lesser alien races because they didn't like their almost all powerful rulers. the captured humans had their DNA damaged so they had no power, and would think less of them self's, so they would never come back to power. they were then isolated on their planet of origin. The other humans that escaped altered their DNA giving up their powers for longer life, and hid away as another race completely. The alien girls grandfather was doing research into the past of their race and traced a location back to earth. But the other alien races learned of the truth before her grandfather and attacked their home planet. the only survivor, the alien girl, stowed away in the research pod made by her grandfather made its way to earth. Traveling for 5000 years, it finally makes its way there, other races have finally long forgotten about humans, except for a few select high ranking members.

Most of this won't seem to matter at first as it will focus on how the human race would react to the sudden gift of these powers in today's world. But there will be little things, even when you think the current plot doesn't have to do with the human race of 10000+ years ago, it will. The main thing i'm working on is how to go about putting in this character i have an idea for, he will show up in the shadows at different points in the story altering them in some way, and will play a major role at one point. and time travel is involved.[/spoiler]
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Misery

None of those are in-universe reasons. If she has some similar qualities to his sister, I think that would be enough to remind him of that time, and feel he absolutely can't let the same thing happen again. And if she looks like she's 8 years old, I think that would be enough to make sure he doesn't fall in love with her. Actually, many works of fiction have a male and female character that should obviously be in a love-type of relationship, yet never openly shows it in any way. So I think that part doesn't even matter. Like I said, this is the kind of thing that seems really significant, if it's never explained at any point readers are going to be confused, or simply dismiss it as bad writing.

By the way, if you want to receive feedback on the story, you shouldn't worry about giving out spoilers. You can make a new topic for people who want to enjoy the finished story without spoilers, if you finish it.

zman9000

OK thanks for the advice. And yes she will resemble his sister but grown up. but she will be older then his sister ever was, have pink hair, and has an ability no one else has.
But he will go crazy if he can't protect her, since he couldn't accept that he couldn't do anything for his real sister.

if she gets hurt he will lose it and go crazy, and will awaken his true power. and until he accepts that he couldn't have done anything to protect his  real sister, he will not be able to use his power, and will end up hurting those around him. And finally the only one who can snap him out of his powered rage is his child hood friend, because she was there for him back when his sister died.
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zman9000

After some time and going back over the plot i posted I feel certain things may have moved to fast for certain events that need to happen, as well as other things I had planned to have in it.

One of the plot events will be some what earlier in the story and it will be called "The Creepy 13"
first thing is, it will be some what early as the bad guys powers won't be to powerful and will still have some restrictions.
It will focus on type 1 and 2 rare, the ability to control other people's body's/living matter and other creepy powers.
The setting will be a small new crime group who is using their powers to slowly take over town after town, and make others submit to them.

I have a few ideas for the powers but not a good way to describe them.
#1: Dimensional form liquefaction - (The easiest way to describe this is, taking the form of something solid in reality and turning it to liquid but it actually is still intact, it just dimensional looks and acts like a liquid to the rest of reality, but it its self is still whole.)
#2: human blender - (for example of the power refer to this link as an example http://onepiece.wikia.com/wiki/Ope_Ope_no_Mi )(The power to, in a way, dice people up with out killing them, leaving them unable to move yet technically still whole.)
#3: Dimensional form control - (ability to control the shape and form of another being, beyond dimensional boundaries) (might be part of #1 but not sure)
#4: Puppet control - (if you can't guess what this is then... idk)
#5: Mind control - (like Puppet control but not quite)
#6: reality hack - (can create illusions on a 5 senses level)
The next 7 aren't exactly death proof.
#7: heart stopper - (ability to control the blood of other living things)(can cause death, as well as can control blood not in a body)
#8: bone smelter - (ability to melt bones)(side effects include, never moving again, becoming a pile of jello, and death if head is walked on)(no defense against this)
#9: living thing transformer - (can change any living thing into anything else that the user has seen before, this includes animals and non living objects.)(if turned into non living object, its the same as death)
#10: Atomic dissemblance - (Ability to remove atomic bonds from any object or person. basically instant disintegration or liquification.)
#11: body diver - (ability to physically merge with another body, and move around them as if they were a swimming pool. damage can be done internally if the user wants)
#12: Body snatcher - (ability to transform ones self into energy and take over another body, pushing the current conciseness to the back of the mind)
#13: Human control - (complete control over the human body, this includes the physical body in both the matter that makes it up as well as the body its self, and mental control and dominance over target.)(one of the several ultimate powers.)

I already have some ideas for story as well as how some fights will go. and one of the above powers will be obtained by the main character, but not sure which yet.
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zman9000

#9
I've decided to go through and one by one explain each power out better. since each of the ability's in my story aren't limited like most action battle story's, i need to make a bit of clarification on them so writing them into the story will be easier. I'll start with the powers the 5 human main characters have.

#1: Super Human (All functions of the human body including strength, speed, dexterity, and thought speed, are 2+ times better then normal)

The superhuman ability is the least rare of all the ability's and 25% of the most common ability users will be super human. As with all ability's they revolve about the user controlling something with their mind. The super human ability is the ability to control all aspects of their own body and is the most natural of the ability's to use. Normal effects are super strength and durability along with extra speed and dexterity. more complicated control of the ability would let the user fly as they could use their mind to make their body move. they also are immune to all illnesses including advanced once created along with the power event.

The main character will passively acquire this ability thanks to knowing and understanding his childhood friend who will also have the power (being her only power)
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#3: Ability Zero (is the same as Original Normal Human, but has the ability to copy any and all powers from anyone as long as the user understands the person, once power is acquired it is permenint and can become stronger over time, and there is no limits on how many powers the user can copy)

Ability Zero is both the weakest and strongest ability of them all. The ability is the incomplete form of the one true power humans once possessed. The ability gives the user the weakness of a normal human before the power event since all humans doubled strength and speed from it, this leaves the user easier to be hurt then anyone else. The main power however is the ability to copy another human's power as long as he has an understanding of the person in question. This ability is the only copy ability that can not only copy ability's but use them as your own and train to get stronger with them. this power has no limits like all powers but unlike the rest, this power can control all in existence given the right copied powers.

The main character gains this ability as his main power during the power event. he is the only one to receive the power as he was closest to the center of the event. the radiation at this point was great but was still unable to unlock the one true ability.
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#6: Technopath (Has control over silicon, electricity, gold, plastic and other such substances used in most electronics and pieces of technology, and can use them to subconisally create different devices that can be used, also slight increased strength and extreme increase in intelligence)

The technopath is a rather odd and specific ability. it gives the user to fully control, change, remake, and create any thing considered technology, along with an inhuman increase in thought speed and mental capacity. however it can also control the elements separately meaning electricity control along with several other common types of matter. the only down side is the user can become mentally unstable, over look things, or become panicked easily.

One of the club members/childhood friend of the main character obtains this power during the power event. he tends to over look things and panic easily with the power, but only the main character becomes mentally unstable from this ability. though he will almost never use the power it has one side effect that effects the plot, being his Insane anger mode of which he can't control his power, and has no memory of the time doing so. he is also rather bad with technology thus he leaves everything to his friend the technopath. (note: the reason the main only receives the side effects and not the power at first may be from only partially understanding his friends past.)
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Knight of Purgatory

Hey Zman, is it okay of i contribute a couple of ideas of my own such as new abilities?
MOAR DARKNESS, MOAR COOKIES

zman9000

no............... OF COURSE YOU CAN!!! I was just getting sad from the lack of interest in it. You can suggest anything, no matter how crazy as long as you are adding to the forum and not spamming jokes.

Besides there will be many more powers then the ones listed in the first post. most just won't be plot relevant or some what rather useless in a fight.

I had an idea today actually of one such power. the ability to have complete control over your voice box, meaning can sound like anyone, or bust eardrums including your own, or even prank your neighbors into thinking their car alarm went off when it was really just you screaming. things like that.

Also I'll add the other 3 of the 6 ability's the 5 main characters will have. (yes one will have two powers as i needed a rival for the all powerful main. just think control over heat/fire along with control over all gasses (note: since the character with these is a prankster, he will be mostlikely pranking people with farts (double note: nothings really final on that yet))) >_<
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zman9000

Changed the name of my story again and I will have to organize this topic a little bit in the next few days.
The new name for the main part of the story will be "god∞zero" may change again but unlikely.

And I'm going to write a Synopsis for it.

"god∞zero" is a story about humanity and how unfair life is. How would the world react to sudden change of people gaining powers and amazing ability's? chaos would ensue surely but what about the other side of it? for all those who do wrong there are just as many who do right. The story follows Zed, a kid in high school along with his friends venturing through this new world. He will witness the dark side of humanity, he will suffer, and he will have great losses. What will Zed find about him self now that things have changed? And can humanity survive with this new found power. Or will something different all together bring out its destruction?
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zman9000

I don't really have dialog set up yet as I'm not sure how to go about it so I've decided to tell the story from a 3rd person view, since I have no clue how to go about doing the dialog. this way other people can picture what I'm picturing and will be able to help with it.

chapter 1
[spoiler]<10000 years ago from present day on a planet near the center of the milky-way>
The focus is on a little kid from a race that all have pink hair and eyes and look human.
She is a 14 year old girl named Hikari and is currently hiding in her grandfather's work shop.
Her planet is under attack my an alien race and will be taken over shortly.
her grandfather finds her and is relieved, but before she can say a word he knocks her out with some kind of drug and places her in a small ship in his work shop.
He then launches it into space where it is seen by the alien armada.
before they have a change to destroy it, it jumps using its Faster then light drive and easily escapes the slower armada.
as her ship moves away the planet can be seen being completely destroyed by a larger ship that just showed up moments earlier.

<10 years from present day on planet earth on the edge of the milky-way>
two young kids are being held for ransom by two armed crooks
The boy is 6 year old Zed and the girl is 4 year old Yui and they are siblings.
The siblings try to escape but are caught.
Yui was caught but was fighting back.
Zed tried to help but was knocked across the room.
As Zed looked up he saw his sister bite the crook and gets free for a second until...
The crook pulled out and shot Yui in the head killing her instantly.
Zed then passed out from shock.

<present day "20XX" earth>
A 16 year old Zed sits in a club room staring at the sky while his friends argue in the background.
Rin a 16 year old girl, Zed's childhood friend, is arguing what they should do this weekend with Koji a 16 year old boy, who is a class clown.
Suzume a 16 year old girl, who is a friend of Rin's chimes in suggesting going camping out behind the school.
another kid named Kyo comes out from behind the computer agreeing with Suzume's idea.
after some antics between Zed and Koji they decide to head home.

<day 0 touchdown>
The group is up early behind the school with only Rin and Koji being fully awake.
they spend most of the day setting up tents and a camp site.
They enjoy the day is if it was summer.
once it starts getting dark they start up a fire and tell ghost stories.
Now dark enough to see stars and the fire running low Zed decided to go up the hill into the woods and gather some more wood to keep the fire going.
Zed now with twigs in tow he is planning on heading back when he hears a huge boom above his head.
He looks up just in time to see a good sized pink glowing space ship that lands hard down on top of him. [/spoiler]

Chapter 2
[spoiler]<day 0 awakening>
The space ship had landed on Zed and in a daze he realizes that he's lost a good portion of the left half of his body and both legs.
Realizing he is going to die his vision slowly fades, but he sees the ship open up.
As soon the ship opens a great pink light shines out like an explosion.
The pink light fills the forest and shoots into the sky.
From space you can see the pink light emerge and begin to cover the whole planet like a torrent of water.
after a few seconds the light fades.
Zed reopens his eyes to find that his missing body parts have grown back and a notable scar he got from when he was younger was completely healed
When he stands up and looks around and is shocked.
At the foot of the ship is a unconscious pink haired girl.
When he goes over to see if she's OK he is again stunned to find she is the spitting image of his long dead sister (minus the pink hair)
His friends come up into the forest and help carry out of the woods to Zed's close by house.

<Day 1 Insanity>
With the girl resting up stairs the group discusses what happened and what they should do.
But before long they get a knock on the door.
At the door is two rough looking men in black type people and they say they are apart on the government that keeps track of alien encounters.
The group leads the men upstairs to the girl where the men start acting weird.
They grab the girl shaking her awake, she begins to fight back where the start to begin to be violent and draw their guns.
the group tries to stop the guys from hurting her but are beaten easily.
Beaten and bruised zed from against the wall looks up and watches as the girl struggles.
One of the men have had enough and fires a shot through her head to where she falls in front of Zed.
Zed's bright blue eyes suddenly turned red as if rage its self had washed over them.
Zed's black hair turned white and he went pale.
In a flash of rage a shock wave engulfed the house and surrounding area
in an awesome display of both power and strength zed moves at inhuman speeds and has one men in a one handed choke hold
Just as fast as he came he flung the man through the wall out of the house and through the roof of another.
Zed then turned half way around leaning sideways with such a look of insanity his friends cringe and the remaining guy drops his gun out of fear.
In another flash Zed has the other man pinned on the ground and is hitting him like crazy.
Rin calls out to Zed to tell him to stop, she asks again and again, and finally screams stop.
As quick as it came the red eyes white hair and insane look vanished and Zed passed out.
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Chapter 3
coming soon.
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zman9000

Got some more details on the powers.
they will be classified the same way earth quakes are classified with each higher number of power/control level being exponentially higher then the former.
scale will be something like 1 to 10 (1 being just barely visible control and 10 being control on a planetary scale) though these numbers won't be brought up in the story into much later, its a good way to keep in mind to not make them two powerful to start out. (example: main character's out of control rage in chapter 2 would put his power somewhere between 2 and 3 at that time with his normal control being 0)

decided that not only will two of the main characters have an out of control mode, but others can get it but it is rare. (causes people to attack anything that moves)

along with the out of control mode there will be an alternate where they don't lose their minds and only increase power/control during times of extreme stress and emotion. everyone can get this, but won't come into play much later.

Final Note: chapter three will be posted sometime today or tomorrow if everything works out.
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