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Evil isn't existing...?

Started by Lord Wolfram, 07, April, 2014, 01:52:08 PM

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Lord Wolfram

It have been 50 years since the grave eclipse. Kraden still travels with Rief around the
world. Then in one day in Tonfon, Kraden went to meet Ryu Kou, the member of the Sanan royal family. And now he is the ruler of the Tonfon. But he wasn't in the throne room, he were at the Library.
With him there was another men. He looked familiar to Kraden and then Kraden spoke.
Kraden:Good day Ryu Kou.
Ryu Kou: Oh it is you Kraden.Err where is Rief?
Kraden:He decided to go around.
???:How like him, ah to bad.
Kraden:This voice...Felix?
Then the person came from dark side of room and Kraden really was surprised it is truly Felix.
Felix:It's been a long time.I see the effect of lighthouse granted to you nearly endless life.
Kraden:It's the same thing to you.Time does really small effect on us 1year to us is like a day.
Felix: Yes it is.But for another things. Kraden Can I ask for you a favor?
Kraden:What is it?
Ryu Kou:It is a stone of sages.
Kraden:What?
Felix:I got one of these and used to revive four persons.
Kraden:Do you mean?
Saturos: Yes!Us!
Saturos,Menardi,Agatio and Karst entered the room.
Kraden:Felix do you understand what you done?!

Thunder-squall

I like this writing style, which mirrors the games.  

However as a newb, I'd also like some "behind the scenes" or "directors's commentary," since I'm sure I'm missing most of the more subtle stuff.

[spoiler]
Perhaps you could write that extra stuff in spoilers
[/spoiler]

Lord Wolfram

Err yes. I have in mind this story.
This can bee really interesting.
Each evening I will post another part of the story.

Daddy Poi's Oily Gorillas

#3
I remember in GS1/GS2, Kraden was known as a wise man/scholar... so he may be a useful character.

Ryu Kou/Sana = Sounds sort of foreign, to me, but maybe it's because I'm not use to those names. You could probably tell us what kind of Adept he is, and what he looks like.


QuoteI like this writing style, which mirrors the games.
Maybe, but we're going to need several proof-readers if this is going to be a masterpiece. (As should be the case for most writers.)

For example, we could vote on how the lines should be written:
Felix:I got one of these and used to revive four persons.
Felix:I got one of these and used it to revive four people.
Felix:I got one of these and used it to revive four of us.
Golden Sun Docs: Broken Seal - The Lost Age - Dark Dawn | Mario Sports Docs: Mario Golf & Mario Tennis | Misc. Docs
Refer to Yoshi's Lighthouse for any M&L hacking needs...

Sometimes I like to compare apples to oranges. (Figuratively) ... They are both fruits, but which one would you eat more? (If taken literally, I'd probably choose apples.)
Maybe it is over-analyzing, but it doesn't mean the information is useless.


The only GS Discord servers with significance are:
Golden Sun Hacking Community
GS Speedrunning
/r/Golden Sun
GS United Nations
Temple of Kraden

Can you believe how small the Golden Sun Community is?

2+2=5 Don't believe me? Those are rounded decimal numbers. Take that, flat earth theorists! :)

Lord Wolfram

Ryu Kou.
this character is in dark dawn.
Simple.

Lord Wolfram

#5
Hard pain,sorrow and agony is in Alex. He have faced ancient guardians any monster, but there was not such foe who could put a god fight to Alex.He found himself cursed. Any one who worked with him.Saturos and Menardi, Agatio and Karst, Blados and Chalis have perished.Alex tried many times to self-destruct but all attempts was in vain.
After the travel with Mathew into the dark weyard Alex saw the soft and warm thing called love.
Alex remember all things of that adventure. It happened a year after grave eclipse.
Fight to open another portal to light weyard. Then to stop the psyenergy vortex and the war against Tuperang. This happened two years but even the blow in tuperang castle in the Zenith tribe.
Alex still survived...
After this adventure Alex said farewell to Isaac and others. Then he made floating castle and in his small castle went in long sleep.
After passing 30 years Alex awoke and once again started his wanderings around the weyard.
Right now Alex is wandering around the weyard, but  after some days he suddenly meats an old friend.
[spoiler]So this was second part of my story. in this post I wrote about feelings of Alex.
Plus small history fun made what could happen after eclipse.[/spoiler]

Luna_blade

So is this like a fanfic? Or are these ideas for a sequel?
Anyway I like it.
"Hear the sounds and melodies
Of rilets flowing down
They're the verlasting songs
Whispering all the time
As a warning that behind some rocks
There's a rigid grap even
Oreads fear the tread"

Daddy Poi's Oily Gorillas

#7
Oh. I guess Ryu Kou never appeared in the first two games?

I sort of wished I should have googled him before asking, because the first result proves he's from GS3.

Seems like a lot of lore that I don't know about?


@Luna_blade: To me, it sounded like a story for a new game, but maybe it could work for a fanfic?
Golden Sun Docs: Broken Seal - The Lost Age - Dark Dawn | Mario Sports Docs: Mario Golf & Mario Tennis | Misc. Docs
Refer to Yoshi's Lighthouse for any M&L hacking needs...

Sometimes I like to compare apples to oranges. (Figuratively) ... They are both fruits, but which one would you eat more? (If taken literally, I'd probably choose apples.)
Maybe it is over-analyzing, but it doesn't mean the information is useless.


The only GS Discord servers with significance are:
Golden Sun Hacking Community
GS Speedrunning
/r/Golden Sun
GS United Nations
Temple of Kraden

Can you believe how small the Golden Sun Community is?

2+2=5 Don't believe me? Those are rounded decimal numbers. Take that, flat earth theorists! :)

Lord Wolfram

#8
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Lord Wolfram

Kraden and Rief  were waiting for Alex. Alex stepped on land. Walked some steps and then looked at Rief.You so much remind me your mother.Alex turned to Rief and walked towards to him.
Kraden then stepped in-front Alex.
Alex:So the blow of Anti alchemy god truly made us all immortal.
Kraden:Yes. We are immortal because we killed  the dark wise one.
Alex:..and the blow give powers that are inherit only by wise one.
Kraden: Actually this power made time to us almost noneffective.
After moment Rief walked to Alex and said.
Rief:Alex...you are in grate danger.
Alex:Really?
Kraden: It is so. Do you remember Northen fire clan warriors?
Alex:What about them?
Rief:They are revived.
Kraden:That is not all.They have got the same power you have.
Alex:Who revived them?
Kraden: It is Felix.
Alex:Felix? Ah I see. He really got mad.Reviving those who were destined to die...
Rief: what do you mean?
Alex:Well how can I put this?You see it is been 80 years since they died.
Kraden:Really so long...
Alex:The presence of those who are gone can make changes in this world.
Kraden:What kind of changes?
Alex:Kraden have you been at the secret room of the anemos sanctatum?
Kraden:Well I remember of an healing spring...
Alex: No! Not the room that healed all your illness.I am talking about the room of ancient
texts.
Kraden:Newer been in there.
Rief:Newer mind but tell us what is so important about this room!
Alex:Whats the rush?
Kraden:Rief! Calm dawn!
Rief suddenly stayed calm and said no word.Then Alex warped himself behind Rief and put his hand on Rief's shoulder.
Alex:It is all right.
Kraden:Alex does in this room is a book about the situation like this?
Alex:Better I show this room. Lets go!
Kraden Rief and Alex warped away and only Small light was left behind for a second...


Lord Wolfram

If you wish to comment the story go on.
I will be happy to read your comments.

Lord Wolfram

#11
Our patience is running out.Where is he?
Felix:I..I don't know. He was on that island.
After moment Saturos turned to Agatio and took deep breath.
Saturos:Do we still need him?
Agatio:Better get ride of him now or later he will betray us like in Jupiter lighthouse.
Karst:Traitors deserve death!
Saturos:No we can't kill him!
Felix:That is right I revived you all.And you must listen to my orders!
Menardi:Really?
Saturos:Hahaha... don't make me laugh.
Agatio:If someone kills him then we will die with him.
Saturos:Of curse but we won't kill him.
Agatio:What do you mean?
Saturos:We will left him in the island. In the island of Takui.
Karst:Takui?
Felix: NO!
Felix took his sword and raned into Saturos.Sword gone through his body.
Agatio made powerfull punch to Felix and he fainted.
Menardi:Saturos! Agatio quick warp us to Prox.There he will be healed.
Karst:Don't worry I will take good Care of Felix.
Karst and Felix warped to Takui but Agatio,Menardi and Saturos to Prox.
[spoiler]this part is about situation in Saturos party.[/spoiler]

Lord Wolfram

Yellow  flesh of light appeared in Takui island.Then on island stayed Felix and Karst
Felix:Karst wait don't leave me here.
Karst:Why do I have to do this?
Felix:Do you know why I revived you?
Karst: Why? Don't ask me stupid question!
Felix:Because I love you.
Karst:You are 80 years too late.
Felix:What?
Karst:Do you know what happened after you lit mars beacon?Of curse you don't!
I and Agatio waited for your party to resource us.But you left us for ded.
Felix:No it's not like it!
Karst:I don't believe you!
Suddenly Karst take out some mystical poution.
Felix:What is it?
Karst:This?It is a poison.
Felix:Poison?
Karst toke of tears from her eyes and spoke.
Karst:use it well.
Karst placed poison on stone then after some moments warped herself away
Felix: Karst! NO!
Felix was left alone in Takui island. This is it the end of Felix...

Luna_blade

Keep up the good work. This is getting interesting.
"Hear the sounds and melodies
Of rilets flowing down
They're the verlasting songs
Whispering all the time
As a warning that behind some rocks
There's a rigid grap even
Oreads fear the tread"

Lord Wolfram


Lord Wolfram

#15
Alex:Braden have you found something?
Kraden:Well...perhaps.
Rife:Look at this book.
Alex:What is it?
Kraden:Lets see.Here is written about ancient spells and it's effects.
Alex:Can you make translation?
Kraden:Yes but it will take some time.
BKaden took paper from his bag and started to thanslate.
Alex:Rife can I talk with you?
Rife turned back on Alex and ignored him.
Alex:Rife, why do you still hate me?
Rife:Because you are traitor of mercury clan!
Alex:But science that day have passed 80 years. And do you remember what I said back then in Apollo leans?I said I am not that Alex you know.I am not power seeking monster.
Rife:Then explain yourself.Why you don't return to Imil?
Alex:Rife you see...
Rife:And why you betray any with who you work?
Alex:The last time I betrayed someone was 50 years ago.
Rife:I don't believe you!
Alex:But then I helped to you at Zenith tribe.I saved you and my son...
Rife:Amiti...
Kraden:Dear god!
Alex:What is it?
Kraden:Look at this...

Lord Wolfram

Well let's make a vote.
I finished story and it has 14 series.
Do you wist to post in day two series.
Vote until tomorrow in this hour.

Luna_blade

...? I'm sorry what do you mean? What do I have to vote for?
For the continuation? Then I say yes.
"Hear the sounds and melodies
Of rilets flowing down
They're the verlasting songs
Whispering all the time
As a warning that behind some rocks
There's a rigid grap even
Oreads fear the tread"

Lord Wolfram

Nonono.
Vote to increase the story posting.
2 series per day!

Lord Wolfram

Karst just returned in Prox.First thing that she noticed was that it was dark.Then she was walking  to Saturos house.the place in which were Felix parents kept.All villager's were asleep so nobody didn't noticed her.Agatio was standing outside the house and were nervous.
Karst:How is he?
Agatio:I don't know.It is a badly wound.Anyway we can't help there.
Karst:I see.Agatio do you too notice this?
Agatio:What?
Karst:It is really dark.
Agatio:just like then when the lighthouse...
Karst:What is happening?
Agatio:I don't know.We must check out the Mars lighthouse.
Karst and Agatio reached Mars lighthouse entrance and first thing they noticed that the entrance was not unsealed. When they climbed lighthouse they noticed that no puzzle were solwed.
And at Aerie they saw theta what they truly feared the lighthouse Bacon  isn't lit.
Agatio:What is going on?